Response #2 - Week 4

You painted the picture very well of the dirty track students on a bus ride home.  i enjoy the slight sexuality about it was well. The word "butts" doesnt seem to fit in for me when i read it thought at the same time it brings up that adolescent language or vernacular. There could be more visual moments in the piece to convey that concrete imagery that this poem seems to lack slightly in. The more images the better.