Wednesday, September 28, 2011

response #1 - week 5

The ending is very nice way to sum of the piece. I enjoyed the more obscure ways to speak of the consumption of the food. The vitamin D im not sure where its coming from whether its outside or with lunch. "white down the tongue" sounds strange to me. I think it could be reworded. Overall it is a good image of lunchtime.

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