“Yes is always I said” sounds dyslexic because it is compared to the obvious way of saying it by stating “I always said yes”. I see how you were maybe playing on words to make it unique but I think it makes more sense if it was structured normally. “Eat your favorite tee-shirt” is a really interesting line because it is out of the ordinary. “Have sleeps” wounds weird. I would like to see more definition as to what is being said “yes” to, and what characters are involved, and create a scene. This poem is about the word “yes” and using it as a life philosophy, however its part in the poem may be slightly excessive because hearing all the “s” sounds can get overwhelming.
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