response 1 - week 11

There are are very large amounts of interesting images in this piece. I find the first stanza cohesive and the third stanza cohesive  in their own individual ways but they seem to be slightly disconnected from each other. The paper airplane seems a little off of the stanza as a image and stalks of celery is the same way for the first stanza. Some of the images in the third stanza become a little heavy and dark and may need to be toned down. There are a lot of great images in that first stanza and i think things could be worked more off of that.